Does this sentence make sense? I’ve been quite worried with the way things have been going recently…

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Does this sentence make sense?

“I’ve been quite worried with the way things have been going recently as people have been dealing very harshly when it comes to the subject of racism, sexism, and homophobia.”

Most of the sentence makes sense. However, there are some slight mistakes that make the whole meaning of the sentence a bit confusing:

 

1. Dealing very harshly

This verb phrase does not make sense. What do you mean by this? What are the people dealing with? Are they the ones that are the target of the racism, discrimination, etc.? If they are the objects of this kind of discrimination, it would be better to say that they are dealing “more frequently” or dealing with more open, hostile, cruel forms of discrimination.

 

2. Subject

Because you are talking about several things that people are dealing with (racism, sexism, and homophobia), the word “subjects” needs to be plural. It refers to all of these things.

If you want to keep the singular noun, you could group all of these things that people deal with into one large group, as discrimination. Then, the specific types of discrimination that you mention could be examples or sub categories. If you did that, your new sentence could be:

  • “When it comes to the subject of discrimination (or prejudice), including (or such as) racism, sexism, and homophobia.”

 

If you would like the whole sentence to include both these changes, I would suggest:

“I’ve been quite worried with the way things have been going recently as people have been dealing with more open and hostile confrontations when it comes to the subject of discrimination, including racism, sexism, and homophobia.”

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